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Re: The Story Teller
Ooh, cool! Very descriptive! And a nice return to the style you had going in the first place... ^-^ Probably the only thing Mr. Realms would recommend changing "orangey." Its ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: Warrior
Despite its obvious lacking of imagery, this poem was compelling. It was the meaning, the feeling, the beautiful simplicity, that pulled me in, and turned the wheels inside my head. ...
Jan 21, 2010 -
Re: The Story Teller
Me again...^-^ This story is becoming very interesting, D. Very well-written! (And original) How are old are you, Durriedog? This could be the writing of a seasoned author, if you ...
Jan 19, 2010 -
Re: I Watch from the Window
I Watch from the Window This wood is etched Across my aging face, Laid on plates of glass, The sill forever my place. . . They came to us at ...
Dec 17, 2009 -
Re: The Elevator Man
Don't really have time at the moment for a review of considerable length... but I thought I would say "nice job!" because the prose is so well-written, and the story ...
Nov 12, 2009 -
Re: Stranger Nights Than These
Nice! ;-) Its a simple poem, but a beautiful one, and (thank goodness) free from annoying grammatical errors and such. Very well done! -Realms. (P.S. The only i would change ...
Nov 10, 2009 -
Re: Tender Mourning
The grass leaks With emerald-green light Which I savour tenderly In my melting brown eyes The sun cries For all its lost, For all its mourned, In its crooked light ...
Sep 30, 2009 -
Re: Words of a Conceited Man
Words of a Conceited Man Why, hello, dear gents and ladies, Have you a second to spare? Then come here and look – This is my work of art. Go ...
Sep 17, 2009 -
Re: Car Hugs
Greetings, this is Mr. Realms, reviewing your excellant piece, "Car Hugs,". Really, honestly, I'm stumped as to what I shoud critisize. If there are flaws, I didn't notice them. Its ...
Sep 16, 2009 -
Re: Bubbling, chapter 1
Greetings to you, my fine-feathered friend, I will be reviewing your piece, “Bubbling,” today, and, hopefully, reviewing it well. So without further adieu…. Overall, I enjoyed what you wrote, bu
Aug 29, 2009 -
Re: The Consequences of Betrayal
This is probably the first poem I'v seen on this site with real potential... it flows well... has that "gut emotional appeal" everyone is drawn to... "shows", dosn't "tell"... has ...
Jul 12, 2009 -
Re: Removed by Author
Congratulations, endless secrets, you have created the first story I have read on this site with nothing to criticize. Really, this is pretty much perfect! Its got gut emotional appeal ...
Jul 2, 2009 -
Re: Stay in the Dark
Wow, this is really well-written. The characters are done just right, without any cheesiness or cliches. I like the main character especially. The diologue is also realistic... and the prose ...
Jul 1, 2009 -
Re: Nerdy Obsession
This has definantly got potential. Its realistic but odd enough to catch my interest... very good start to a story. Like another reader mentioned, its good with bringing you right ...
Apr 30, 2009
